You.
November 22, 2011 § 14 Comments
I cannot be
what you have lost
and you may not be
what i never had.
But still i long
to hold your hand
to walk beside you
on the path less taken.
Because walking beside you
i feel that i am in my place
because dancing beside you
i can truly dance.
Despite and because
of your depth and carefree-ness
despite and because
of your heartbreak face.
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It is so upbeat and full of assurance. Perhaps you may consider changing “heartbreak” to be congruent with the poem. Or if you intent is contrast my suggestion is not relevant. What do you think?
It is full of assurance, but it is written from a broken heart’s perspective. And his face is heartbreak, well mostly. That breaks her heart, all the more!
I see
š
heartbreak!!!
Kind of!
Back then.
These words depict the re-birth of love (or finding it again) with the insecurity of now and then, knowingly or unknowingly, trying to compare what you lost and what you have !
i am starting to like you! š
I already like you – thas why I am stalking (following) you !!
thankyouverrymuch!
š
curious – why you took out all the spaces from between !!
i do that only when i thank from the bottom of my heart. š
Felt. Honored. Escalated.
entirely, my pleasure. š